A humerous story well told. Marje reminds me of my first wife, but I must stress only from the tragic and dramatic poses she adopts. A kind of 'silent movie star'
Mind you in my schooldays , sex was a'very taboo' thing. No mention wwas made of the birds and bees, but the occassional 'bike' was thrown at the permissive girl ( A little before her time). Good girls never mentioned any word tha could be construed as sexy and personal hygiene was a silent subject. Back to your book Bryony. Your descriptions are not only realistic but factual to the reader. A good book. Completely different style from my writing but I enjoyed it. Thanks for the read.
A little proof reading is required as there are a few 'typos' and punctuation mistakes. 'jet leg' for 'jet lag' Narrative is in the first person and at times is rather schoolgirlish in style, but as the character herself is only eighteen this is acceptable. The dialogue needs to be carefully looked at. Are those the words that you would actually use, if you were the character?? Eg ' Hello! my name is Samuel. what's yours?'
You don't need 'Paris' in the Louvre Museum Tou, either, prune out words that are not required.
'I kind of figured' an Americanism. OK if the book is only for the US.
'I spent last Summer in Paris, a graduate present from my mother' would be better as would one or two other sentences. Your sentence ='It was silent between us. I looked for an answer' - a little too stinted ' Maybe ' he didn't speak ( answer)---- in place of it.
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